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¡¡¡¡3¡¢Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
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¡¡¡¡4¡¢Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
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¡¡¡¡2¡¢Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.
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